Proofreading/Feedback for "Super Jock Sluts" Ch.3

Hi everyone!

I was wondering if anyone wouldn’t mind to proofread Ch.3 of Super Jock Sluts, this gay superhero series that I’m currently writing. I have already published Ch.1 and 2 on this site and I’m both anxious and nervous to post the next chapter. If anyone has any interest in also giving me some constructive criticism that would be greatly appreciated too, just send me a private message or email and we can discuss this further.

Thank you,
Sky Larkin.

@SkyLarkin I’d be glad to proofread for you. Just PM me.